Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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people
believe that the most effective way to improve citizen
health
is by developing sports facilities
massively, while others say that these programme
provide little impact and need another alternative. In my opinion, Change the determiner
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the discussion
First
and foremost, increasing the number of sports facilities
such
as jogging track, mainstream field, and other specific arena
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arenas
are
beneficial to enhance public Change the verb form
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health
in Indonesia. By providing this
venue, Add an article
a citizen
the citizen
citizen
will Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
able
to express their interest in any sort of Add a missing verb
be able
exercise
freely without limitation. Therefore
, the development of public health
is extremely beneficial. However
, this
facility concentrates in the city centre; it rarely develops in the
remote area, so Correct article usage
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the government should formulate Correct word choice
apply
the
other effective solutions.
The essential programmes that must be conducted by the authority are not only from Correct article usage
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facilities
but also
encourage individual spirit as well as provide health
checker to give an alert of warning. Instead
of doing exercise
in public
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a public
facility
, it is more effective and efficient if Fix the agreement mistake
facilities
people
conduct their workout
at home. They can utilize any Fix the agreement mistake
workouts
kinds
of house equipment Fix the agreement mistake
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such
as stones, woods
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the
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exercise
tools. Moreover
, in order to anticipate the late measurement such
as
overweight and over, the government should actively provide Add the preposition
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initial
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an initial
health
checker that can easily find by Add an article
a citizen
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citizen
, so that they can understand their Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
health
level before it getting
worse.
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facilities
are beneficial for only a part of citizen
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close
to the venue, while Change the verb form
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people
in remote
area are difficult to reach them. I would advise the ministry of Add an article
a remote
health
of the Republic of Indonesia to focus on educating people
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about
exercise
at home and providing health
checker
as a preventive action.Fix the agreement mistake
checkers
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