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Many people believe that having a fixed punishment for all crimes is more efficient. What are the advantages and disadvantages of having a fixed punishment.

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Almost all societies are concerned about the rate of
crime
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 and violation which makes them struggle with various ways in order to solve it somehow. It is believed that ways of punishing criminals should be the same for all offenders, while
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 there is a contrary view as it is not fair to have a fixed punishment.In
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 two points of view will be discussed. Fixed penalisation can bring benefits for society,
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 as decreasing the amount of budget which is spent on various sentences and
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 consuming less time to decide about a particular way for punishing. It can be accepted that the rate of committing a
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 would decrease by
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 method.
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, a shoplifter cannot tolerate the same punishment which is sentenced for a murderer too. The aim of punishing is just the decrease of lawlessness in society, and it is not the only factor that prevents criminals from committing. Sometimes people, in order to defend themselves or even others' lives, do something wrong unconsciously, which may result in a
crime
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 so psychological behaviour and the situation in which
crime
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 happened should not be ignored
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 High level and low-level
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 offenders are punished in the same way and it is against the law of human rights.There should be a difference between someone who commit murder and someone who steals others' property. To put it in conclusion,
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 there are some positive factors related to fixed punishment , human rights are prominent too
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 other factors
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 as situation,mental problems should be taken into consideration.
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