Some people think children should study at school and other think they should study at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree

It is undeniable that the children these days are getting opportunities to have a choice between to
study
from school or their home and
this
has become a point of contention . majority of the crowd considers that school is the best place for the kids on the other there are people who argue that home is a perfect place to
study
. I am absolutely in favour of the crowd who holds the perception that educational institutes are best for the students .
This
essay will delve into why people have different perceptions and my State of opinion
in addition
. There are few benefits available if a student
continue
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to
study
from his own
accomodation
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accommodation
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for example
this
would be
cost effective
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because the
tution
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tuition
fee will be charged in less proportion compared to
fee
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charged for studying in the institutes . A child will be able to learn and grow without stepping out of the comfort zone .
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, one
don't
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have to get up early to pay
visit
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a visit
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to
school
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the school
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as own
accomodation
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accommodation
is the place where the kid
have
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to
study
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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