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In today’s competitive world, many families find it necessary for both parents go out to work. While some say the children in these families benefit from the additional income, others feel they lack support because of their parents’ absence. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There is no doubt that modern life today is becoming more expensive, so some families consider it necessary for
parents
 to go to
work
. The question is, do the
children
 in
this
 family benefit from the income or do they feel they lack support due to the absence of their
parents
. I'll take a look at each of the presentations and give my own opinion in conclusion. ‎‏in
term
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 of
advantage
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, some people say that the
children
 in these families
are benefit
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 from
this
 revenue .
main
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 reason given to support
this
 claim is that when both
parents
has
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work
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 the life
becom
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become
becomes
 easy . to
illustrat
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illustrate
illustrator
 ,
father
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 in
thes
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the
this
familly
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family
Familly
 is
reponsable
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responsible
of
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 the important things
for
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pay
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bill
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the bill
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of
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 the
electric
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 and water and
also
 ,
pay
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 the fees of
children
 school
and
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apply
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The mother is responsible for the things that
children
 need,
such
 as supermarket items, and entertainment things
such
 as
children
's toys.In
the
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othere
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other
 words ,
Eeasy
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Easy
 life and
happy
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 family. ‎‏
On the other hand
, the absence of
parents
 may affect the
children
.
First
, when
parents
 go to
work
 at the same
time
 for long hours, the kids stay alone for a long
time
.
For example
, it can affect the education of
children
 because their
parents
 focus more on their career, and mothers and fathers have less opportunity to play and spend
time
 with their
children
 and
this
 affects their
children
's
behavior
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,
in other words
, it may lead to some diseases
such
 as autism. ‎‏In conclusion, I believe that we cannot change the fact that
parents
 should
work
 but
parents
 should make
time
 for their
children
 . With the
work
 of both
parents
, there will be additional income and a much higher standard of living, which will bring benefits to all family members
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dual-income households
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • emotional well-being
  • parental involvement
  • social development
  • extracurricular activities
  • childcare solutions
  • time management
  • career advancement
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