Some schools have restricted the use of mobile phones. Is this a positive development or a negative one?

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of the population of the world today has become

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on their mobile phones. Some schools have banned the

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of cell phones by

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on campus. In my

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rule will have a positive effect on children as it will not only improve their

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help them develop their social skills. Restricting phone

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in the classroom will improve the

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better learning experience.Without their cellular

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will be less distracted from the teacher and it will become easier to pay attention in class.

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without any distractions from the ringing and buzzing

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these children will

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more on the task in front of them and not check their notifications. If not

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their lack of

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can become a serious problem in life as they would not be able to give their utmost attention to any specific task.

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I think restricting phones would help learners in improving their

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and attention spans. Another reason why I think limiting

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of these devices will be a positive development as it will

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help pupils to develop their social skills.

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access to social media and messaging applications,

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are more likely to interact more with the

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people surrounding them in real life which in return would help them understand social cues. They will discuss various topics and even play more games with their classmates,

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and form healthier habits.

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access to social media and

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the internet

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can make people

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detached

from reality and have

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a negative

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effect on their social life. Restricting

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phone

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will help children in staying

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connected

with their immediate surroundings and have better social well-being. In conclusion,it is important to teach the young to

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things in moderation and help in

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healthy lifestyle habits.I support the restriction of

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cellular

devices on school campuses by

students

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as I think it will help them better their

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spans and

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build their social skills.