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Human activity has had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world. some people think that this cannot be changed, while other believe actions can be taken to bring about a change. discuss both views and give your opinion.

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People
 have different views about changing environmental problems caused by human activities. while Some
people
 disagree with the idea of reducing adverse effects on natural habitat, l believe it Can be changed if governments take Some actions. There are two main reasons why it could be argued that Some
people
 believe negative effects, which are based on human activity never Can be changed.
Firstly
, the world's population is growing, and demand is growing with it. the growing population is having an adverse effect on the world resources.
For instance
, if the world's population increase,
people
 will request more water for drinking, cleaning and cooking
then
 which lead to a water shortage.
secondly
, plant and
animals
 species depend on each other, and due to overhunting and fishing For using
animals
' meat and fur some
animals
 will become extinct. I would agree with those who believe that a negative influence only can be controlled
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 if governments do some actions. Only governments can tackle
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that problem by changing laws and they ensure that they are enforced.
This
 can be seen by imposing tighter controls on companies that do not treat or dispose of waste or imposing Fines on illegal hunting.
Also
, they Can provide better education concerning the importance of plants and
animals
 in human's life have a long-term impact on natural habitats. Because if children's awareness increases, they will keep their wildlife better than their ancestors.
For instance
, if they know about the importance of recycling plastics and other materials, they will encourage to recycle more. In conclusion, while there are some reasons to believe that negative effects on the environment can not be controlled, they can be changed if some actions are done.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • negative impact
  • extinct
  • deforestation
  • pollution
  • habitat destruction
  • mitigate
  • reverse
  • stricter regulations
  • protected areas
  • endangered species
  • education and awareness campaigns
  • biodiversity
  • consequences
  • renewable energy sources
  • organic farming
  • eco-tourism
  • environmental regulations
  • sustainable practices
  • natural ecosystems
  • preserve biodiversity
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