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Present a written argument or case to an educated non-specialist audience on the following topic. Globalization has led to the introduction of many new international products into local shops and markets. What do you think are the main advantages and disadvantages of this example of globalization?

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The connections of all countries in the world which
enggage
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engage
 in several cooperation make globalization era can not be avoided. The
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globalization
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globalizations
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globalization
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 will affect
to
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every single aspect of our
live
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lives
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, particularly in the main
economy
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economic
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 sectors. In my opinion, the
conditions
 will provide high-value advantages for all of the local shops and
market
, if
all
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economy
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 stakeholders can
utlise
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utilise
this
 platform to the right corridor.
Altough
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Although
 there are several new international products coming to our local
market
, we can still
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 with our own. There are two strategies I could deliver to develop and protect the local shops and markets.
Firstly
, we should study the
conditions
 and compare international
product
 quality to contradically enhance the local goods.
This
 planning will support the original
product
 to improve
the goods quality
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the quality of the goods
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 starting from the production until the packaging.
As a result
, the
locals
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product
 will increase its value and
ready
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 to compete with the international one.
Secondly
, we should study how the international exporter can export
thier
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their
product
 to our
country
,
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 so that we can
also
 doing the same to export our
product
 to go to
international
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the international
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market
. By that, there
is
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 mutual benefits circular in
this
considtion
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consideration
condition
.
In
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 the other hand,
however
, if we failed to utilize
this
 chance, it could be a nightmare for the entire
country
. There are three disadvantages if the government could not protect the local shops and markets from the
glabalizations
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globalization
globalizations
market
. The
first
 thing is, the local
product
 will disappear
in
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 its home because it could not exist due to the lack of demand.
Second
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 one is the local
shopers
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shoppers
 would not have an opportunity to develop their
economy
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economic
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conditions
, and the
last
 will affect to
country
economy
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 growth as
uncreative
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the uncreative
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country
 in the global
market
conditions
. To conclude,
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globalization
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globalizations
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globalization
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 in
economy
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 sectors will provide several positive
impact
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 if the players can maximize their
creatvity
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creativity
 to survive in
the
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world competitions.
In
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 the other side, it will bring the worst
circumtances
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circumstances
 if people
not
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do not
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 utilize
at
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 all. The government and stakeholders have the important rules to stabilize and maximise
this
 chance in order to create mutual benefits
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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