Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Being a good parent is a teachable role that has been viewed as a
schools'
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responsibility to foster.
Schools
are providing an environment where not only can we learn from teachers but
also
can learn from our classmates and their families. I agree with the above-said view and will discuss the characteristics of a good parent and the rationales behind them in
this
essay.
To begin
, the
schools
' duty to prepare students for their future careers is out of the question and parenting is a career that should be located
above all
. We are being trained at all the seconds that we are spending at
schools
. First, we are being taught different subjects including the necessary ones for parenting in the classrooms.
In addition
, teachers have been improving their methods of education over years of experience and after being a mother or a father and
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to convey them to their students.
Second,
we are educating by listening to our friends' stories about their
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with their families between classes.
For instance
, after watching how bad behaviour affects one of our friends we might decide not to react the same with our future offspring;
on the contrary
, if we understand how our classmates' family cultural behaviours have helped them to grow, we will try to use them in our future lives. A great number of various features for an acceptable parent are being suggested by experts. The most obvious one is a liability because we can not raise a child properly unless we
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our influences on them.
Moreover
, we are expected to be flexible and
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. The fast speed of twentieth-century improvement requires parents who know these changes to make a good relationship with their children.
Third,
being
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is an integral characteristic of teenagers
hence
patience is essential for us to deal better with them.
To sum up
,
schools
have been playing an increasingly important role in educating students about parenting. I agree that we can learn a lot about
this
subject during those years in our classes which includes responsibility, flexibility, and patience.
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