Some people believe that countries should produce food that population eats and import food as less as possible. To what extend do you agree or disagree.

In my
opinion
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this
can not be realistic as most of the
countries
in
west
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the west
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does not have
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agricultural
agriculcural
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an agriculcural
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environment. Due to
which
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this
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they are unable to plant
food
on
the
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their
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own land,
thus
they have to
import
food
from the counties where
climate
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the climate
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is suitable for
the
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apply
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agriculture.
For
example
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if we discuss
about
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the
asian
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Asian
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countries
specially Pakistan, it can grow almost all nessasory
food
items because of the
enrich
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enviroment
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environment
for agriculture,
therefore
Pakistan can implement no
food
import
policy.
On the other
hand
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there are
countries
like Greenland where the climate is not physible for most of the plants
specially
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vegetables and fruit, so to
fullfill
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fulfil
the need they had to
import
it from other
countries
. By
this
mean
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the other
countries
with healthy environment got
oppertunity
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opportunity
to earn by exporting its goods to those
countries
who can not produce it. While developing
countries
damage
there
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economy through high imports of eating items. Because
food
is needed on daily
bases
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basis
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which means daily
import
. So to avoid
this
situation developing
countries
can implement policies to eat what they can grow easily.
For
example
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Sirilanka
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Srilanka
have
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massive fish farming if they can consume fish on daily
bases
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basis
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they
woud
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would
not find any need for
import
but they will be focusing more on export. To put things in a nutshell, due to diverse
environment
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conditions all over the world it can not
be implement
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be implemented
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. For
countires
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countries
with
higher
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a higher
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agricultural land
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ratios
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ratio
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this
becomes an
opertunity
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opportunity
to do a profitable business. The developing
countries
can implement
this
stratagy
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strategy
to gain control
on
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there
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their
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economy
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economies
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.
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