Some people believe that countries should produce food that population eats and import food as less as possible. To what extend do you agree or disagree.
In my
opinion
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,opinion
this
can not be realistic as most of the countries
in west
does not have Add an article
the west
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agricultural
agriculcural
environment. Due to Correct article usage
an agriculcural
which
they are unable to plant Correct pronoun usage
this
food
on the
own land, Change the word
their
thus
they have to import
food
from the counties where climate
is suitable for Add an article
the climate
the
agriculture.
Correct article usage
apply
For
example
if we discuss Add a comma
,example
about
the Remove the preposition
apply
asian
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Asian
countries
specially Pakistan, it can grow almost all nessasory food
items because of the enrich
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enriching
enviroment
for agriculture, Correct your spelling
environment
therefore
Pakistan can implement no food
import
policy. On the other
hand
there are Add a comma
,hand
countries
like Greenland where the climate is not physible for most of the plants specially
vegetables and fruit, so to Replace the word
especially
fullfill
the need they had to Correct your spelling
fulfil
import
it from other countries
. By this
mean
the other Change the verb form
means
countries
with healthy environment got oppertunity
to earn by exporting its goods to those Correct your spelling
opportunity
countries
who can not produce it.
While developing countries
damage there
economy through high imports of eating items. Because Replace the word
their
food
is needed on daily bases
which means daily Correct your spelling
basis
import
. So to avoid this
situation developing countries
can implement policies to eat what they can grow easily. For
example
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,example
Sirilanka
Correct your spelling
Srilanka
have
massive fish farming if they can consume fish on daily Change the verb form
has
bases
they Correct your spelling
basis
woud
not find any need for Correct your spelling
would
import
but they will be focusing more on export.
To put things in a nutshell, due to diverse environment
conditions all over the world it can not Replace the word
environmental
be implement
. For Change the verb form
be implemented
countires
with Correct your spelling
countries
higher
agricultural land Correct article usage
a higher
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ratios
ratio
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,ratio
this
becomes an opertunity
to do a profitable business. The developing Correct your spelling
opportunity
countries
can implement this
stratagy
to gain control Correct your spelling
strategy
on
Change preposition
of
there
Replace the word
their
economy
.Fix the agreement mistake
economies
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite