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Band 5.5

Some people believe that countries should produce food that population eats and import food as less as possible. To what extend do you agree or disagree.

In my
opinion
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this
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 can not be realistic as most of the
countries
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 in
west
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the west
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 does not have
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agricultural
agriculcural
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an agriculcural
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 environment. Due to
which
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this
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 they are unable to plant
food
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 on
the
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their
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 own land,
thus
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 they have to
import
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food
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 from the counties where
climate
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the climate
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 is suitable for
the
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apply
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agriculture.
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example
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 if we discuss
about
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apply
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the
asian
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Asian
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countries
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 specially Pakistan, it can grow almost all nessasory
food
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 items because of the
enrich
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enriching
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enviroment
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environment
 for agriculture,
therefore
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 Pakistan can implement no
food
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import
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 policy.
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hand
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 there are
countries
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 like Greenland where the climate is not physible for most of the plants
specially
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 vegetables and fruit, so to
fullfill
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fulfil
 the need they had to
import
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 it from other
countries
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. By
this
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mean
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means
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 the other
countries
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 with healthy environment got
oppertunity
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opportunity
 to earn by exporting its goods to those
countries
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 who can not produce it. While developing
countries
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 damage
there
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their
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 economy through high imports of eating items. Because
food
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 is needed on daily
bases
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basis
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 which means daily
import
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. So to avoid
this
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 situation developing
countries
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 can implement policies to eat what they can grow easily.
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example
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Sirilanka
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Srilanka
have
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has
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 massive fish farming if they can consume fish on daily
bases
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basis
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 they
woud
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would
 not find any need for
import
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 but they will be focusing more on export. To put things in a nutshell, due to diverse
environment
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environmental
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 conditions all over the world it can not
be implement
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be implemented
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. For
countires
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countries
 with
higher
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a higher
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 agricultural land
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ratios
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ratio
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this
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 becomes an
opertunity
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opportunity
 to do a profitable business. The developing
countries
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 can implement
this
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stratagy
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strategy
 to gain control
on
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of
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there
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their
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economy
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economies
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.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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