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Some think that climate change reforms will negatively affect business. Others feel they are an opportunity for businesses. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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In the 21st century, Global warming is one of the most discussed issues. The leaders of the developed countries are trying to solve that problem by proposing many countermeasures.
Therefore
, the majority of industrialized companies and
business
 holders are concerned about new reforms while others are expecting more opportunities. I believe that reforms will affect negatively on some businesses, both are discussed in the following paragraphs. It is obvious, that mankind polluted immensely nature after the industrial revolution.
Thus
 leaders all over the world doing their best to confront
this
 issue. Until now the essential action which was taken by the countries was imposing the high tax on the petrol industry. That measurement might affect the car industry because since petrol is not cheap anymore affording the private car will be a luxury enjoyment.
However
, the collapse of one
business
 can open a new
business
such
 as the electronic cars industry.
Moreover
, the restrictions on the production the plastic goods and
bags
 can cut the profits of huge companies. Whereas the supper markets and grocery shops always need
bags
 and they will find the solution by using the
bags
 made of the fabric. Spontaneously, another opportunity for the new
business
. Considering the fact that fabric
bags
 are way more long-lasting compering to plastic ones, the customers will be satisfied with the new product. To sum it up, climate changes reforms can affect some businesses negatively but at the same time, it is creating new industries as well.
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