Some people think it is important to spend time in developing a successful career while others think it is more importany to spend time with family and friends. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays,
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struggling to achieve their ambitions, because many individuals believe that having a victorious future is very imperative to survive happily without worries and tensions.
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,others claim that consuming a lot of
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with families is important.In my view,we need determination towards our goals to get a decent salary.
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essay will discuss both statements. To embark on,there are ample benefits by getting a successful future.
firstly
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,we can earn more money in order to we can purchase anything that we need.
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,there is a chance to live luxurious life like having own house and car.
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,increases satisfaction rate as well as decreases stress.
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,it gives you a sense of identity as well as there is a chance to become
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person.
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to
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you do not have to
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dependent
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on other people.there is
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one disadvantage,you do not have enough
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to do entertainment,because you
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with how to reach your goal.
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,according to
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future ensures healthier life and amusement. On another hand,
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play a crucial role in their children's
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,so every child try to communicate with them.the advantage of consuming
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with them
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mental health.
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,the greatest gifts
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give their children is nurturing and caring for them as they grow into adults.
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,every child
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that taking care of families is
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thing.when I was young,my family used to take care of me,now,it is my responsibility to protect them by talking with them.
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,these days,nursing homes are rapidly increasing due to careless of people.many individuals put their
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in old homes
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because they do not have enough
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to see them. To conclude,people have diverse mindsets which vary from one person to
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another person
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,so it depends on their choice,whether the career is important or
parents
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are important.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • prioritize
  • strike a balance
  • ambitious
  • dedicated
  • work-life balance
  • career-oriented
  • professional success
  • financial stability
  • personal fulfillment
  • contribute
  • supportive
  • cherish
  • bond
  • memorable
  • experience
  • social connections
  • commitment
  • advocate
  • sacrifice
  • juggle
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