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“Prevention is better than cure” Out of a country’s health budget, a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and preventative measures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

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it is argued that educating the masses to avoid health issues is better than curing the patient.
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 we will discuss how preventative measures can better an individual life,
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 we will see how the
treatment
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 is affecting people financially. It is said that educating the human population regarding diet, exercise, sanitization is very important. In developing nations, many are not aware of
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 information. If a human eats nutrient-rich food avoid empty carbs and unhealthy drinks like soda and sugary drinks, it will prevent them from many harmful sicknesses
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 a person can stay healthy by following a simple exercise routine and by staying clean and sanitized. For an instance, the main suggestion to avoid the Covid-19 virus given by the doctors were to stay sanitized and follow a healthy diet.
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, the
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diseases
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 is one of the major issues in countries like India. Where a huge number of the population are not covered by insurance but
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 have a high rate of
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. Many people have declared themself bankrupt while paying for their treatments.
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 in metropolitan cities like Mumbai is very expensive. A report publishes in Mumbai mirror newspaper where 30 per cent population are unable to treat their illness. In conclusion, it will be a wise decision if humans are taking care of themself by exercising and following a balanced diet.By following some steps they prevent themself from getting overloaded with financial burden caused by the
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 of the
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