Many people believe that zoos have no purpose in today’s world and should be closed. What problems do zoos bring? What are the alternatives to zoos if they are closed?

In the present, there are a number of people that reject the fact of the existence of zoos. There is
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should live in their natural habitats and not be slaves of the system that humans created just
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. I personally agree, that
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kind of entertainment, has to
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recreational activities
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because I consider
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cruel and negligent with the
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in many senses.
For example
, Polar bears belong to areas with extreme cool weather, despite
this
, are taken into countries with tropical climate where is totally different;
therefore
, they suffer the consequences due to the lack of adaptation to
this
forced change until they certainly die.
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, many animals suffer behavioural issues sometimes they look
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or angry, and
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is because they obviously do not live in a healthy space and there are deprived of their freedom. In numerous
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as we
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know, lions and tigers are often subjected to drugs, to control their natural instinct as depredators with the objective of
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them or
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a picture with them, as an extra gift for the visitors. In conclusion, I agree with the opinion to close
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. A possible solution
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could be to request more alternatives and flights promotions for travellers who want to visit them in their natural habitats,
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rather
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promote the programmes and tv shows where we can observe them in their own environment. I think we need to be aware responsible and gentle with the animals and respect them in their own space.
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  • ethical and animal welfare
  • artificial habitats
  • psychological distress
  • abnormal behaviors
  • conservation
  • inbreading
  • wildlife sanctuaries
  • rehabilitation centers
  • naturalistic habitats
  • virtual and augmented reality
  • ecotourism
  • wildlife documentaries
  • educational platforms
  • genetic pool
  • immersive experiences
  • conservation education
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