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With increasing populations and ever growing urban centers, many countries are losing their natural beauty spots. What benefits are there to protecting places of natural beauty? How can this be solved?

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Growth in population affects natural beauty as it loses its sole purpose. If we do not focus on resolving it, we might live in a polluted atmosphere. The main advantage of protecting natural beauty is having a cleaner environment for living as the population is increasing day by day, directly affecting the demolishment of green
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 as people utilize that land for a living. If we focus on avoiding the destruction of trees, we are indirectly helping humans live healthy lives.
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 of abolishing it, we should focus more on saving them. Tourism is the utmost benefit of saving natural
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. Most developing countries prefer spending their holidays in underdeveloped countries or cities because
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 gives them a feeling of attachment to
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 world. A person feels relaxed and calms while watching green
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 that’s why most people prefer to travel to the
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 with lots of trees and grass.
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, Pakistan has become a tourists attraction because of its northern regions. Because of the wide range of natural locations, verity of trees and high mountain peaks. One of the solutions to
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 problem is providing awareness to the locals about the consequences they can face after losing these spots. Tell people about the importance of
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 is beneficial. Another solution can be implementing some regulations like if someone tries to abolish these locations, a heavy fine with imprisonment can be imposed. Another alternative could be the government should restrict urban
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 to be built nearby a natural place ask them to plan them in rural
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. There are numerous benefits of saving the beautiful locations in urban
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, so we should be more focused on keeping them for better living.
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