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In some countries, governments provide payments for unemployed people. How does this impact people? Is this a positive or negative development?

The
government
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 in certain countries pays money to
individuals
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 during their unemployment periods. In my perspective,
this
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 can bring positive
development
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 to society and the
government
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 as a whole. Citizens, who have an opportunity to receive funds when they have lost their jobs, feel more protected. Our lives are full of unpredictable situations, and,
individuals
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 must feel secure from these unpredictabilities.
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, persons can have some health diseases, or their profession can lose its relevance and, due to these mentioned situations,
individuals
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 may lose their jobs. If a situation developed by these negative scenarios, persons would count on some
government
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 supports for the time, when they are searching for appropriate jobs, or treating their diseases.
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, these situations may increase tension in society and lead to economical destabilization. Payments for unemployment, doubtless, have a positive impact on society and economical progress. It is well-known fact that only those, who have confidence in their future lives can develop as a person and a professional.
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, if citizens did not believe in their future, there could not develop
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. Because, in these circumstances, persons think only about providing their current needs, due to the lack of belief in the future.
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,
individuals
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 from regions in the West of Kazakhstan have the lowest education level in comparison with other regions of the country.
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 situation shows, how the feeling of security is important for people's personal
development
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, which is a part of the
development
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 of a whole country. And the feeling of security is based on the level of
government
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 support. In conclusion, should be pointed out how important
government
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 supports are, especially during the unemployment period. Taking the above-mentioned information into account, in my perspective, these supporting have positive influences on the social and economical
development
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 of the country.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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