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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#country #language
There are too many
people
 around the world that are thinking about emigrating to another
country
, seeking a better life. But only a few of them really think about the complexities
to
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 living in a
country
 of another language and culture. The fact that living in another
country
 changes your social life and
also
 causes you many problems in practical terms to a great extent, cannot be overlooked. It is obvious that going to live in a more developed
country
 can benefit you in various ways
such
 as new job opportunities, a larger income and probably some more freedom. But it will affect your social life in every possible aspect. ,
,
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Definitely
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first
 and the most important challenge is the new language. A person who has newly arrived in a
country
 might not be able to speak fluently and even understand the particular language. It may influence the opinion that the local
people
 make about that person which can have a negative effect on their future communications. Another difficulty that migrants and immigrants can face is the cultural difference between their own
country
 and the
country
 where they live now. The native
people
 might easily get offended by a statement you may say to them which not considered offensive in your birthplace. It will definitely affect your relationship with them in the future. Many
people
 find it difficult to adapt themselves to
this
 issue that they did not have in the past.
People
 care about their culture a lot and, it is enormously important to be respectful towards it. So you need to be more careful when you talk to
people
 and use only carefully thought-out phrases in your daily conversations. In conclusion, emigrating to another
country
 has its own benefits, as well as too many difficulties. These problems cannot be ignored and you need to find a solution for them before you actually start living in the new
country
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 because
to begin
 to deal with these complexities after your emigration might be too late.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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