The dangers of smoking are well known, yet many people continue with this habit. What are the causes of this? How can we reduce smoking in society? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

The government and
the
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doctors have always tried to educate
people
the
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disadvantages of smoking.
However
, there are still numerous
people
enjoy
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who enjoy
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smoking despite all the risks
on
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to
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their health conditions. In my opinion, one of the
reason
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that keeps
people
smoking is that it relaxes
people
. In
the
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modern society, everything is fast-paced and stressful. Smoking provides a quick solution for
people
to release their stress and anxiety.
Moreover
, it is not
costy
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costly
cost
either
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or
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difficult to purchase
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cigarette
cigarettes
cigaratte
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a cigaratte
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.
For example
, you can find
cigaratte
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cigarette
with
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a cheap
price
in every convenience store in Taiwan. It makes smoking easy for everyone.
Furthermore
, there are many scenes in movies showing actors smoking. It provides a cool and trendy image of smoking and leads
the
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young
people
to imitate the
behavior
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behaviour
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.
Nevertheless
, smoking is harmful to human beings.
For instance
, it can bring severe lung problems and lead to
a
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cancer.
Therefore
, the government needs to take
actions
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to protect their citizens by preventing them
smoking
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from smoking
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.
First
of all, raising the
price
of
cigaratte
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cigarette
cigarettes
and
vaper
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vapers
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can be one of the solutions. Once it is expensive to purchase, the
amout
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amount
of
people
smoking will diminish. If it still doesn't work well, banning smoking can probably be the most effective method.
For instance
, Taiwan has recently passed the law of
prohitbitting
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prohibiting
vaper. It has already reduced a certain
amout
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amount
of vaping
behaviors
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behaviours
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in the young generation.
On the other hand
, it
also
makes sellers scared to sell it and
thus
reduces the resources of purchasing vapers. To
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summerize
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, I believe that the function of releasing stress, cheap
price
, and the cool image of
cigarattes
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cigarettes
are the reasons why
people
keep smoking even though it can cause
dieases
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diseases
. To reduce
the
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smoking
behaviors
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behaviours
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, the
governemnet
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government
can raise the
price
of
cigeratte
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cigarette
cigarettes
or ban smoking with strict rules. Comments:
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