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In recent years, the family structure has changed, as well as family roles. What are the changes occurring? Do you think these changes are positive or negative? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Lately, the family has little changed, and the role of
women
 become more mainly than the role of
men
.
Moreover
, more families prefer boys to daughters. I think,
this
 tendency has a more negative effect, due to some reasons, which I explain below.
First
, I would like to example China. Several years ago they implemented a policy, which required one child for one family. In consequence, the people become prefer boys, because they are heir. They did abortion if knew that it is a girl.
As a result
, in China, the percentage of
men
 is more than
women
.
Therefore
, their
men
 can cot find a wife o marriage. So I think that the negative side of
this
 structure is more harmful to the community than useful.
Secondly
, it is no secret that matriarchy is increasing every year.
Women
 became more independent and they have higher requirements.
Men
 correspondingly do more things for
women
, purchase expensive brands.
Moreover
, in today's tendency, where
women
 are more than
men
,
men
 became more worthy of their
women
. Correspondingly,
women
 rule their
men
, their families. It is sad. Because
men
 have to be strong and the head of the family.
However
, today's situation requires something else. In conclusion, unfortunately, it depends on people. But more
women
 have neglected their conditions and taken the rule to own themselves.
On the other hand
, government policy is affected too. The people have to obey Government rules, at that time to secure offspring.
Thus
, it is not good policies as for the government, as for habitants.
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  • Family structure
  • Modern family
  • Extended family
  • Nuclear family
  • Same-sex parent families
  • Breadwinner
  • Caregiving responsibilities
  • Family dynamics
  • Globalization
  • Economic shifts
  • Migration
  • Child-free lifestyles
  • Cohabitation
  • Traditional marriage
  • Perceptions
  • Homemaker
  • Communication
  • Shared activities
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