Many people nowadays spend a large part of their free time using a smartphone. What do you think are the reasons for this? Do you think is a positive or negative development?

Today,
smartphone
Add an article
the smartphone
a smartphone
show examples
is one of the largest entertainment
device
Change to a plural noun
devices
show examples
. Everyone uses
this
for
Change preposition
to
show examples
reduce
Change the verb form
reducing
show examples
their
boredem
Correct your spelling
boredom
. I admit that it is
the
Correct article usage
a
show examples
negative development in
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
society. A number of reasons why people use
Add an article
a smartphone
the smartphone
show examples
smartphone
Fix the agreement mistake
smartphones
show examples
in their spare time.
Firtst
Correct your spelling
First
reason for using
Add an article
a smartphone
show examples
smartphone
Fix the agreement mistake
smartphones
show examples
is that people are addicted to social media
application
Fix the agreement mistake
applications
show examples
such
as Facebook, Instagram, Snapchat and many more. All these applications are very popular among youngsters. They use
this
on
mobile
Add an article
a mobile
the mobile
show examples
device
Fix the agreement mistake
devices
show examples
to kill their free time. It is the best source of entertainment.
Furthermore
,
nuclear
Add an article
the nuclear
a nuclear
show examples
family is one of
the
Remove the article
apply
show examples
another reason
Fix the agreement mistake
other reasons
show examples
.
Submitted by rayatsahil7 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
Topic Vocabulary:
  • screen time
  • digital addiction
  • instant gratification
  • multifunctional
  • connectivity
  • social networking
  • online services
  • self-expression
  • entertainment options
  • instant access
  • educational resources
  • communication tools
  • virtual interactions
  • distracted living
  • technological dependence
What to do next:
Look at other essays: