Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve the mind, such as reading and doing word puzzles. Other people feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
There is an undeniable fact that free-
time
hobby has great
impact on our quality of life, whereas it is widely argued that making most of the pastime is by being mentally engaged with activities Add an article
a great
such
as solving puzzles or reading books, others assume that having rested in our time
of pursuits, ultimate productivity in our regular basis can be achieved. However
, I partially advocate the idea of participating in more challenging recreations rather than remaining in rest
mood.
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a rest
To begin
with, some group of people
share the view that, if we have a great deal of time
the best way to fill this
gap is by bringing more tranquility
in our life. Change the spelling
tranquillity
This
mainly lies in the fact that,
nowadays most Remove the comma
apply
people
have hectic
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a hectic
work
schedule
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schedules
being
obligated to Wrong verb form
are
work
for prolong
hours despite their own desire and preference. Due to Change the form of the verb
prolonged
this
fact they are more inclined to have more sense of pleasure in life to enhance their productivity. To illustrate, many big companies expect from
their workers to Change preposition
apply
work
for extra hours and with heavy workloads or finish a project within thin
deadline without considering the mental capabilities of their employees. it is clear thatAdd an article
the thin
,
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this
misbehavior
can put Change the spelling
misbehaviour
high
strain on them whereby, Add an article
a high
leads
to mental fatigue. After finishing Correct pronoun usage
which leads
work
, they are exhausted that their only requirement is to unwinding
, by taking a nap or having a good Wrong verb form
unwind
time
with their families.Some people
think that it is important to use leisure time
for activities that improve the mind, such
as reading and doing word puzzles. Other people
feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time
. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
On the other hand
, I take the notion along with others that the significance
role of leisure Replace the word
significant
time
is so high that are
irreplaceable with any other activity. Change the verb form
is
Although
most individuals experience symptoms of fatigue after work
, involving ourselves in hobbies as
solving a puzzle is an opportunity to sharpen our skills as well as Correct quantifier usage
such as
entertaining
. As an example, Wrong verb form
entertain
a
recent research conducted by a group of Australian psychologists focusing on mental fitness conducted that, those who do intellectual games like puzzles, have Remove the article
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strengthen
their power of thinking and can make a quick Change the verb form
strengthened
decision
in Fix the agreement mistake
decisions
unexpected
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an unexpected
the unexpected
situation
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situations
also
, recreation activities such
as reading books presumably improve our knowledge by which, we can do better in many social situations.
To conclude, to
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too
many
free Replace the quantifier
much
time
is worthwhile by not being seriously active and enjoying more of the day, however
, I believe having an active and social hobby in time
of pursuits helps on
in self-improvement and serves a higher purpose than just relaxing.Change preposition
apply
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