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Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behavior. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Although
 local
people
 are welcome a visitor who travels to their
community
 they want them to follow their regulations and cultures. While, some
people
 think why they should follow local
people
, and they should accept the various
culture
. In the following paragraph, a reason to support my opinion will be discussed. Many
tourists
 do not know about the
culture
 and local behaviour which they should follow even some
people
 will know about it. so it makes a conflict between the visitors and local
community
 in different ways
such
 as the visitors who do not follow the
regulation
 will be a penalty by the official, local
people
 think the
tourists
 are strangers which they have different of their behaviour and some
countries
 are conflicting in the religion because they have respect in the various gods.
On the other hand
, some
people
 want the local
community
 to nice welcome not only the
tourists
 of their religion but
also
 many
people
 from anywhere in the world. So they want freedom for dressing which they can wear any kind of the clothes and local
community
 are accepts to the difference between the
culture
.
Moreover
, the government of travelling should allow the
regulation
 which
tourists
 have freedom for regular behaviour. In conclusion,
although
 many
countries
 have welcome for
tourists
 without the
regulation
 or resistance by local
people
, some
countries
 have many a limitation for travelling in their
countries
such
 as the
regulation
,
culture
 and religion. In my opinion, the government should give information about how to nice welcome
tourists
 and knowledge about the difference of each
culture
 in any country.
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