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People today can use the internet to learn about lives and cultures in other countries, so it is not necessary to travel anymore. Do you agree?

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Nowadays, the Internet is influencing all of our lives overwhelmingly, people tend to learn about
countries
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 and different cultures via web crawling.
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, novice aspect is becoming popular among society which travelling to other
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 might be diluted.
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, regarded to
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 my view is contrasting.
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,
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 of the major concerns individuals used to travel not only to gain knowledge about other
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 but
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 to discover the whether.
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, in the winter bunches of tourists are visiting
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 as Sri Lanka, Maldives and Indonesia to experience the tropical climate. Even though people can learn about other civilizations from the internet, it is not worthwhile than the live experience,
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 as the real feeling
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 receives by visiting on a pilgrimage to holy places in Sri Lanka and India and photographing cannot get through referring to the web.
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, another main reason most people prefer travelling is to participate in cultural events, rather than watch them via social media.
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 good example is the "Kandy Perahera",
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 of the world-famous monumental ceremonies, which celebrates annually in Sri Lanka.
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 involves dancers, drummers and even Elephants, which attracts a flock of tourists interested in Photography and researching various cultures.
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, most of the visitors fond to try different food cultures and stay in a hotel to relax and be away from their busy lifestyle, which is not achievable by referring to the web. To sum up, anyone can comprehend by analyzing the aforementioned information, no
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 can get the experience of travelling by internet.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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