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Some people think studying from the past offers no benefit to today’s life, while others believe that history is a valuable source of information for us. Discuss both views and give our own opinion.

The present state that we are in today is the outcome of our past. Whatever topic or
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 it is still an important source of knowledge for all of us.
does
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 it really matter if it's in the past? Or some people nowadays are just too lazy to overlook our ancient
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.
To begin
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 with, let me share with you my own experience with
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 matter. When I was in college, we had the
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 "Rizal", it's an anecdote about Jose P. Rizal
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, who's
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 said to be the National Hero of the Philippines. It was discussed how he fought for our country
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 he's the reason why the Philippines has experienced independence. Some of my classmates argued, "
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 do we have to take
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?" if we are studying our asses off to become a Nurse. Definitely, they would think that there's no benefit or
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 nothing important about
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. They explained that for
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 it's just a waste of time and effort.
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, I think they're just too lazy to learn about
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 certain person. And
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, they argued how irrelevant
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 was.
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, I am one of those who
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 that
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 past of a certain country or person is important. Whatever or whomever we are today is greatly influenced by our
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. In order to be aware of our past, we should be educated
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 that information.
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, it is probably right to include
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 in all academic aspects of education. Well, we should know how we were able to relish the freedom and situation we have in the present. In conclusion,
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 is important
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so
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 matter how boring it is or how interested a person on the topic. As a saying
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 "
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 repeats itself", it may repeat or
reoccur
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recur
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 someday
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 as learning
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it,
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 we are
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 prepared for it. In order to fully enjoy our present, we should be fully aware of our past.

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structure
Plan a clear intro that states both sides and your view.
coherence
Write topic sentences for each paragraph and link ideas with simple connect words.
content
Give more real examples that connect to both views.
lexical
Use only simple words and short sentences to reach level of top 100 words.
content
You discuss both sides and give your own view.
coherence
You use signposts like 'To begin with' and 'On the other hand'.
structure
There is a brief conclusion that restates the view.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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