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People today can use the internet to learn about lives and cultures in other countries, so it is not necessary to travel anymore. Do you agree?

#people #internet #lives #cultures #countries #travel
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modernisation takes place in almost every aspect of our
lives
, technological development
also
 spikes.
One
 of the major advancements achieved by humans is
internet
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the internet
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. Information about almost everything and anything can be received on different websites. With the availability of data regarding
lives
 and cultures from various parts of
globe
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the globe
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, some people think that travelling is not necessary anymore. I personally disagree with
this
 statement and
reasons
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 are stated in
forthcoming
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 paragraphs.
Firstly
, understanding a particular culture of a place requires experiencing it personally. As it is well, "Travelling is an investment to the soul." It nurtures
one
's spirit by enlightening the self towards different faces of the world. Humans are social animals. Travelling does not only gives us the opportunity to explore
lives
 in various countries but
also
 allows us to meet new people.
This
 encourages the exchange of values and knowledge.
Furthermore
, travelling is an excellent means to take a mental and physical break from daily cliche routines
On the other hand
, reading some articles or watching travel blogs cannot give
one
 the same value. An individual can only imagine what the information provider expresses.
For example
, some documentaries on the internet suggest that 'Switzerland is like heaven on
earth'
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. The reader can only think of how beautiful the place is. But to visit it and soak its serenity might be a completely different experience.
Moreover
, the data present online cannot always be reliable. Most of them are published by unknown sources and might misguide about a particular culture. To summarise,
internet
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 is a phenomenal technology and
one
 can enjoy its perks to learn about a destination. But it cannot replace the visual experience that
one
 achieves by travelling to the same. Especially, if the goal is to connect with the
lives
 and traditions of a country, travelling is the best and
necessary
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 option.
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