The pie charts below show the amount of electricity generated by energy source in scotland for 20 years ago and last year.

The pie charts below show the amount of electricity generated by energy source in scotland for 20 years ago and last year.
The
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pie
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describes
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the percentage of
Electricity
produced in
Scotland
. The
two
different
pie
charts
exhibits
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the
amount
of
electricity
produced by using seven different
kind
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kinds
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of
energy
source
in the past 2 decades and
last
year
in
Scotland
. As per the
pie
Charts
shows Coal had generated the highest
electricity
with the
amount
of 41.4 %
energy
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for the past 20 years. Gas was the
second
main
source
of
energy
with average electric production of 22.3 % which is 19.1 % lesser than Coal. Nuclear was considered
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the
third
main
source
of
energy
to produce
electricity
with
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total
amount
of 19.6 % of
energy
. The remaining
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of
energy
sources
was able to
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less than 10 % of
Electricity
,where
oil
was marked as the lowest capability to generate
electricity
with
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an average
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of 2.1 % in the past
two
decades. The record
also
proved that
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Scotland
had used the same
source
of
energy
in order to produce
Electricity
past
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the past
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year
.
Comparing
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to the other kind of
sources
, Coal
had
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generated the highest
amount
of
electricity
with
highest
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amount
32.7
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% of
energy
in the
last
year
.
Then
, Nuclear
had
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generated 26.4 % of
energy
and the
third
highest
source
was Gas with
total
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the total
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amount
of 21.7 %. The other
sources
didn’t generate much
electricity
. The minimum of
electricity
generated was by
Oil
with
total
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the total
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amount
of 4.0% of
energy
is
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in
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the past
year
. In Conclusion, the above
two
pie
charts
gave
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explanation that
Scotland
had
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used the same
sources
of
energy
and the
energy
produced was almost the same for the past years. Among all the different
sources
, Coal was the highest and
Oil
was the lowest in producing
energy
for generating
electricity
.
Moreover
,
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other
source
of
energy
such
as Nuclear, Other renewables and
oil
had increased
its
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their
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production in the
last
year
. Some of the
Source
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Sources
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of
energy
had
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decreased
its
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their
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productivity
last
year
compared to the
last
two
decades.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, third".
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