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Some people think that parents should teach their children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There is an opinion that parents are responsible for
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 of their
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, but
also
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, there are has
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 opportunity views that
school
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is play
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a
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 main role in
children
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's
life
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. What regards
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my opinion, I think that as
family
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a family
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, as
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school
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a school
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 should take care of offspring's
life
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.
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, mother and father are
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an example
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example
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 for their heir from their birth. It is can not off responsible from them. They should have to be
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right
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the right
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 people to bring up their
children
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 and to grow dignity person.
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, they must
to
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learn their
children
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 with
right
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 things,
such
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 as how to use good manners, that they need to respect old people and animals, other people, to share with others
with
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some things and to be intelligent
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everywhere
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every where
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everywhere
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.
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, they ought to learn
them
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to defend themselves at
school
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 and other places,
also
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 in different situations.
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, schools are
not
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exception
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the exception
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, because the
children
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 spend more time
at
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there.
Children
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 are faced other students and talk with them.
Teachers
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 necessary to observe
a
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 behaviour of
children
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 and to direct
to
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them to
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righ
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right
 way. They have to point them other aspects of
life
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, which
children
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 are not given by parents.
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, classmates and environment are affected to person's character and some
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 principles.
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, with good friends student finds
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right
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a right
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 way, but if he
forced
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 with not good students, his situation is sad and he can use narcotics and
other harmful thing
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another harmful thing
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 when he will
teenager
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a teenager
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In
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 summarise, I have made a conclusion that both parents and
school
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 are very important in
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life
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the life
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 of every child. Everybody
are
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is
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example
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 for them. They grow watching them and copying their behaviours, considering that it is good and
right
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. So, I think that all need to bring up themselves
firstly
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, after that the
children
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, to form
worthy
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a worthy
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 community.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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