Some people think that parents should teach their children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

There is an opinion that parents are responsible for
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of their
children
, but
also
, there are has
a
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opportunity views that
school
is play
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a
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main role in
children
's
life
. What regards
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my opinion, I think that as
family
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, as
school
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a school
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should take care of offspring's
life
.
Firstly
, mother and father are
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example
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for their heir from their birth. It is can not off responsible from them. They should have to be
right
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the right
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people to bring up their
children
and to grow dignity person.
For example
, they must
to
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learn their
children
with
right
things,
such
as how to use good manners, that they need to respect old people and animals, other people, to share with others
with
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some things and to be intelligent
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everywhere
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every where
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.
Moreover
, they ought to learn
them
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to defend themselves at
school
and other places,
also
in different situations.
However
, schools are
not
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exception
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the exception
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, because the
children
spend more time
at
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there.
Children
are faced other students and talk with them.
Teachers
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necessary to observe
a
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behaviour of
children
and to direct
to
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them to
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righ
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right
way. They have to point them other aspects of
life
, which
children
are not given by parents.
Therefore
, classmates and environment are affected to person's character and some
life
principles.
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, with good friends student finds
right
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a right
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way, but if he
forced
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with not good students, his situation is sad and he can use narcotics and
other harmful thing
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when he will
teenager
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.
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summarise, I have made a conclusion that both parents and
school
are very important in
life
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of every child. Everybody
are
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example
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an example
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for them. They grow watching them and copying their behaviours, considering that it is good and
right
. So, I think that all need to bring up themselves
firstly
, after that the
children
, to form
worthy
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a worthy
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community.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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