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Some people think that business,academic and scientific information should be kept private. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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A group of people have views about keeping
information
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 privately with regard to the
business
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,academic and scientific. While declaring scientific
information
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 publicly may have some drawbacks,I consider that sharing academic and scientific
information
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 is effective for the usage of the community. It is believed by some that
business
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,academic and scientific
information
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 should be unreachable for the citizens of countries.The supporters consider that announcing
information
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 can cause some catastrophic results in all 3 fields.The reasons behind that are the accessibility of
information
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 by terrorists in science,negative outcomes of publicizing
information
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 in the
business
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 world, as well as reachable academic data,
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 worsen the situation more than it has seen.While these could lead to negative consequences,I do not agree that we should
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 be deprived of all
information
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 in all these fields.
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, I consider that academic and
business
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information
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 ,not scientific is more necessary to be shared with society in terms of being informed about changes throughout the world.Why academic
information
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 should be open to the public is because of making conditions easy for the researchers of learners , whether they are students or not.As regards
business
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 data, it is crucial for investors who want to access all
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 about companies for making comparisons before investing in those companies.
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,scientific
information
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 may be accessed by terrorists easily ,if shared publicly,it does not give the right not to access some scientific
information
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 by the people of countries. A case in point is the exploration of climate change. By getting through
information
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 about drawbacks of it,they can be involved in prohibiting its negative results. Whereas,
information
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 like nuclear power,should be kept at closed doors. In conclusion,I highly believe that all detailed
information
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 referring to academics and
business
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 should be open to the public,with the exception of scientific research where some should be applied some restrictions.

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