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Many people say that the only way to guarantee a good job is to complete a course of university education. Others claim that it is better to start work after school and gain experience in the world of work.

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Some people believe that finishing a course of education from
university
 is the only way to obtain a good career, while others are of the opinion that working after finished school and gaining experience from
work
 is more important. In the following paragraphs, both of these views will be discussed in detail. On the one hand, completing studying at
university
 is a significant issue to have more opportunities in
work
. To illustrate, some companies require a certificate from a
university
 to apply for a position, which means that
students
 completing education have more opportunities to
work
 at these companies.
Moreover
, there are some specific careers in which the employees are required to complete a special course
such
 as an architect, engineer, and lawyer.
This
 means that
students
 must have the knowledge before obtaining a job.
On the other hand
, commencing
work
 after finishing school is beneficial for some
students
 because they can directly gain experience from
work
 at an earlier
time
, compared to other
students
 spending
time
 for study at least four or five years.
Furthermore
, some subjects being studied at
university
 are unnecessary for some careers;
thus
,
instead
 of wasting
time
 and money to study at
university
,
students
 have more
time
 to improve their
work
 skills and learn specific knowledge at
work
. In conclusion, even though completing a course of
university
 education is not a 100 per cent guarantee for a good career in life, there are some important issues that
students
 must concern about before making a decision in their life.
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