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Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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People opine that there is a set of local practices and custom traditions that are required by outsiders who go there to adhere whereas some others believe that visitors serve as reputable guests who should be honoured and accepted despite their different cultural backgrounds. I believe that adapting to local customs and behaviour are important so that we do not infuriate others while we are sitting together with them.
On the other hand
, we should be flexible enough to accept that they might be unaware of their conduct. I will discuss both perspectives in the subsequent paragraphs and elaborate on why it is so. There is
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vast difference in cultural practices especially when the east is compared to the west. Religious rights and obligations
also
 play an important role between a Muslim and a non-muslim
country
. In my
country
for example
 where the majority are Muslims, wearing attire
that is
 very revealing and sexy are shunt upon. Being barefooted while entering homes and places of worship are compulsory ,unlike the westerners. Selling liquor and pork in Pakistan
on the other hand
 is prohibited strictly. Serving a Hindu beef
nevertheless
 is considered to be very disrespectful. As we all know, tourism serves as the backbone of any
country
's economy and imposing extremely strict rules by which foreigners are forced to abide may drive them away. Due to the advancement of technology and modernization, our world has become a small global village. People tend to assimilate various cultural practices and are more open to the acceptance of each other differences.
For example
, Qatar Airways which is one of the most popular airlines in the middle east serve liquor on board.
Besides
 that, selling pork is
also
 legal in Malaysia despite the larger Muslim population. We have managed to adopt a multi-facet background since it is a multi-racial
country
 and due to these adaptations, we have not only managed to live in perfect harmony but there are fewer pressures on outsiders to come in as tourists. Summing up, It is important for us to understand and adhere to local customs and behaviour to prevent unnecessary conflict and desolation by a particular society .
However
, some modifications towards these novel beliefs and traditions may be conducted to eliminate the overwhelming culture shock one has to undergo due to these cultural variations.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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