Some people say that traveling along is better than travelling with a group of people. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays,many individuals tend to commute when they are free from work like weekends as well as getting bored,but many
people
believe that commuting with friends is far better than going solitary.In my view,travelling with other
people
ensures ample benefits.
this
essay will discuss both statements. To
emabark
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on,going with a team of
people
facilitates entertainment and reduce the boredom like we can talk the whole journey.
secondly
,there is a chance to play games
such
as cards and ludo in order
to
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we can pass the time easily.
moreover
,sometimes it gives us strength and confidence,so we do not have to
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by seeing
a
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unknown
persons
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.
additionally
,we can watch a movie together through the mobile phone.
for instance
,during my summer vacation,I went to one famous temple by
a
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train with my friends.I did a lot of
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with her company by seeing
the
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nature through window .it was my best memory in my life,
therefore
travelling with someone enables safety and caring. On another side,as far as
Iam
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I am
I'm
concerned, staying at home is better than travelling alone
,
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because it is dangerous
,
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if we commute alone and something happened to us
like
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a small accident
then
nobody going to assist us,
therefore
it leads to
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issue.
in addition
to,there are no enjoyment and
unsaftey
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safety
unsafety
.
for example
,recently my friend
have
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gone to
supermarket
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by
a
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bus for groceries.unfortunately,she got a heart attack in her middle way nobody was with her after some time volunteers came and took her to hospital,but
finally
she died.actually,I mean to say that travelling with a group of
people
is very imperative. To conclude,many individuals have
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mindset
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which
vary
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from person to person,
therefore
they decide whether commuting a team of
people
is
safety
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or going alone is
safety
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.going with other
people
facilitates more benefits than commuting alone.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • collaborative environment
  • discussion
  • debate
  • exchange of ideas
  • critical soft skills
  • communication
  • teamwork
  • leadership
  • emotional and motivational support
  • isolating
  • personalized pace
  • efficient learning
  • self-discipline
  • accountability
  • educational progress
  • distractions
  • group dynamics
  • commitment
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