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Many people believe that media coverage of celebrities is having a negative effect on children. To what extent do you agree?

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Media
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 is one of the most powerful
tool
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 in the world. It is essential to our daily
life
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 and updates us with everything going on around the world. Lately ,
media
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coverage
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 has mostly been about
celebrities
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 rather than actual news.
Celebrities
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 play an important part
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 our daily lives. We admire and adore our favourite
celebrities
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 and criticise those we are not fond of.
People
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 indulge in the daily lives of
celebrities
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 so the
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coverage
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 is in accordance
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 the majority of
people
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. There are advantages and disadvantages
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media
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coverage
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on
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celebrities
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 for
children
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. I do not agree that
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coverage
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 of
celebrities
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have
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 a negative impact on
children
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 . the disadvantage is that they will act according to what they see on television.
Celebrities
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 live a very high profile
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 surrounded
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 expensive things.
Children
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 might get interested in materialistic things rather than learning what
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 is about. From my point of view,
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coverage
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on
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celebrities
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 could bring positive outcomes on
children
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 more than
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negative effects. They can get inspired and ambitious towards working their goals. Being ambitious is an important factor in
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. There is no
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 without ambition and goals. Seeing
celebrities
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 on TV might make some
children
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to
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become, models, singers, actors, actresses, directors, and many
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 relating to the entertainment sector.
Children
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 could get inspiration from their favourite celebrity and work towards their future goals. Recently, many
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 have become aware
about
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 climate change due to the
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coverage
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on
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celebrity
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celebrities
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 like Greta
Thungberg
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Thunberg
.
People
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 tend to copy the actions of their favourite celebrity and it helps them become better
people
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. There would be no news, no entertainment without
media
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Celebrity culture
  • Glamorization
  • Unrealistic expectations
  • Self-esteem
  • Scandals
  • Role models
  • Moral development
  • Mental health
  • Influence
  • Exposure
  • Social media platforms
  • Charity work
  • Inappropriate behavior
  • Perfection image
  • Negative impact
  • Inspire children
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