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Many people believe that media coverage of celebrities is having a negative effect on children. To what extent do you agree?

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Media
 is one of the most powerful
tool
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tools
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 in the world. It is essential to our daily
life
 and updates us with everything going on around the world. Lately ,
media
coverage
 has mostly been about
celebrities
 rather than actual news.
Celebrities
 play an important part
of
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in
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 our daily lives. We admire and adore our favourite
celebrities
 and criticise those we are not fond of.
People
 indulge in the daily lives of
celebrities
 so the
media
coverage
 is in accordance
to
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with
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 the majority of
people
. There are advantages and disadvantages
for
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to
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media
coverage
on
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of
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celebrities
 for
children
. I do not agree that
media
coverage
 of
celebrities
have
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has
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 a negative impact on
children
 . the disadvantage is that they will act according to what they see on television.
Celebrities
 live a very high profile
life
 surrounded
with
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by
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 expensive things.
Children
 might get interested in materialistic things rather than learning what
life
 is about. From my point of view,
media
coverage
on
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of
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celebrities
 could bring positive outcomes on
children
 more than
the
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apply
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negative effects. They can get inspired and ambitious towards working their goals. Being ambitious is an important factor in
life
. There is no
life
 without ambition and goals. Seeing
celebrities
 on TV might make some
children
to
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apply
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become, models, singers, actors, actresses, directors, and many
job
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jobs
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 relating to the entertainment sector.
Children
 could get inspiration from their favourite celebrity and work towards their future goals. Recently, many
people
 have become aware
about
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of
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 climate change due to the
media
coverage
on
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of
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celebrity
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celebrities
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 like Greta
Thungberg
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Thunberg
.
People
 tend to copy the actions of their favourite celebrity and it helps them become better
people
. There would be no news, no entertainment without
media
.
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