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Violent leisure programs has bad impacts on children. What are the causes and solutions for this problem?

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Today Television has become an inseparable part of our lives. We are dependent on it for news, entertainment and so on.
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, it is evident that violent entertainment series have negative impacts on kids. I will be discussing the reasons and solutions for
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 issue in the following paragraphs.
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 world of cutthroat competition entertainment industry wants to attract as many viewers as possible. To do so, they use vulgar scenes and violence to attract people. Their main target audience is the youngsters, who have attracted to bad things easily.
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, many children start drinking alcohol or start smoking as they follow the superstars. Similar is in the case of violence, as youngsters
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 start doing the same just to look cool and superior to other people.
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, it can be said that violent leisure programs have a bad impact on pupils. In my point of ,view the most effective way to solve
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 issue is awareness among children. To my way of thinking we should make our kids aware that these things are not real and what is shown over the screen is just acting. The other way to do the same is that local authorities should make laws in order to restrict
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 violence in
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 and tv series and
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 but not least the censor board should take strict action against the producers or directors who make
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 violent
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nutshell we can accumulate the fact that
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, production companies will make the same type of
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 and series to attract viewers at the same time it is our responsibility that we should not watch
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movies
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 if we don't watch these
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 and discourage the makers and they will start making meaningful
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 in the future.
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