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Writing Samples
Band 4

Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Improving the
environment
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 is as important as having
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next
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the next
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 generation. We produce offspring to the world so that they continue
the
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humanity while we show no love towards the so-called Mother-Earth. Taking care of the
mother-nature
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mother nature
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,
such
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 as improving the
environment
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 , is neither just for one
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people
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person
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 nor
a
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 organization.
Its
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 a
responsibilty
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responsibility
 for all
man kind
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mankind
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, individually. Individuals can do nothing to improve the
environment
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 cause only governments and large
companies
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 can make a difference. I partially agreed
to
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this
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 statement. One of the
reason
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reasons
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 is that
people
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tend
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tent
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tend
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 to be selfish and stay in
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comfort
confort
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their confort
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 zone carelessly. There are a few
number of
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people
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 who actually care about the
environment
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 and started taking action example, by using reusable straws, paper bags,
recycleable
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recyclable
 cans and bottles
instead
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 of plastic ones but
majority
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the majority
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 of the
people
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 are still using plastic straws, bags, cans and bottles ,
hence
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 there is little to no improvement in the
environment
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.
Thus
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 governments including
the
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large
companies
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 should stand by the minority. The question is " How ?". The answer
is learn
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is to learn
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 from
Singaporian
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Singapore
. The way the governments encourage its
people
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 and the large
companies
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 to
use
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 eco-friendly
products
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. Even if they wanted to
use
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 non-eco-friendly
products
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 , they couldn't due to the high taxes and an
incredible
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 large amount of fines.
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 , the large
companies
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 advertise
people
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 to
use
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 eco-friendly
products
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 by showing sea and land animals suffer from pollution. Due to sympathy,
people
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 started to
use
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 eco-friendly
products
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 in order to save animals and those who couldn't
sympatise
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sympathise
sympathize
also
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 started using eco-friendly
products
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 due to
large
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 amount of fines. In conclusion, to improve the
environment
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 not only
peopel
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people
 should do
individually
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it individually
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 but
also
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governements
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governments
 and large
companies
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 should
invlove
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involve
involved
 in it to be more effective and more successful.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental awareness
  • sustainable practices
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • waste reduction
  • conservation
  • ecosystem
  • pollution
  • climate change
  • responsibility
  • leadership
  • legislation
  • investment
  • collaboration
  • systemic change
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