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In the past important knowledge of culture and history was started in museums nowady information is freely available on internet therefore is no longer need for museum. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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History
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 plays a salient role in our life as it tells us about the incidents that happened in the past.
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, it is reckoned by certain individuals that owing to the availability of modern technologies like the
internet
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, we do not need
museums
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 to confer
information
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 about past and culture. I partially agree with
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 notion, since both
internet
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 and
museums
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 are significant in their own
place
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. Initiating with most paramount reason how
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internet
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 provides us details about the
history
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, it allows a person to explore all the past of world by sitting at one
place
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 comfortably.To elaborate it, with the aid of the
internet
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 one can easily get interact with people of other cultures and can know about the
history
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 and traditions of their culture without travelling to their native nation.
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,
last
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 year when the corona pandemic was going on,a school in France organized a digital museum event through the
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 in which they showed the ancient items and wax statues of the London museum;
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, the
internet
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 can be used in the
place
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 of
museums
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.
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,
museums
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 can be replaced by the
internet
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 , to get real interaction of ancient things like a sword, the crown of kings and to receive genuine details about them a person has to visit
museums
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.To explicate it, when we visit
museums
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 we can see and feel the presence of old items in front of our eyes, which is not possible on the
internet
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 as well as we
also
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 get real knowledge about those items from the experienced worker of
museums
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, while on the
internet
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 there might be a chance to get incorrect
information
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.
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, according to the survey of times of India 40 to 50 per cent of
information
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 on the
internet
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 is false, since the
internet
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 offers everyone to upload any
information
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 about anything without verifying it.
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,
foundation
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 are best to get authentic details about
history
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. To conclude, there are certain limitations to using the
internet
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 at the
place
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 of
museums
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 even though the
internet
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 is capable of providing knowledge about
history
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.Personally, I believe gallery
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 needed to render advice to our upcoming generations.
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, their use should be regulated

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • invaluable
  • interactive
  • exhibit
  • artifacts
  • preserve
  • contextualize
  • authentic
  • curate
  • promote
  • educate
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