Some people think that to have a successful career it is important to continue studies. However, some believe that the key to prosperous career is to get experience rather than academic education. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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A highly controversial issue today relates to whether to have academic learning continued for a good job or not. While some argue that
experience
is more important than
education
, I believe that
education
is required for
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position. There are people who argue that the benefits of gaining
experience
considerably outweigh its disadvantages. The main reason for believing
this
is that the minority of companies accept workers who have no
education
degree
but there are strong
experience
a
lot
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company.
In addition
, It is
also
possible to say that the worker who
obtain
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international certificate whose not
education
certificate and increases their value in the business world. One good illustration of
this
is sometimes the few international companies opt
employees
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due to
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backgrounds and certificates.
On the other hand
, I believe that ongoing learning can help
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worker
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get promoted faster. It is argued that the bulk of people who have master or PhD degrees obtain good job opportunities.
For instance
, Ugur Shahin
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is CEO of Biotech due to PhD
degree
.
Furthermore
, if candidates have master and PhD degrees, the company is paying higher
salary
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than bachelor graduate candidates in
the
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many countries. A particularly good example here is the university, if candidates are not
doctoral
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a doctoral
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degree
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, they are not suitable for demands and do not accept university staff.
In addition
, there are a lot of science companies, which have to require
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degree
and give
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salary
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. In conclusion,
although
some argue that increasing work
experience
to make easy get job opportunities without a good
education
degree
.
However
, on balance, I firmly believe that a successful career demands continuing
education
.
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