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Some people believe that all children should have a pet or an animal to look after. Other people disagree, however, saying that this depends on a child’s circumstances. Consider these opposing views and give your own opinion.

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It is often said that children benefit from staying at
school
 during the term.
However
, the issue is not entirely straightforward, and arguments can
also
 be made against the idea.
This
 essay will discuss the controversy and give a concluding view. On the one hand, those who oppose the boarding
school
 point out that spending childhood with their family can bring wide range
benefits
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 to the pupils. These range from spending quality time with parents, creating childhood memory and positive
behavior
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 as teenagers. Another argument, the opponents would cite is homesickness and bullying, meaning that
the
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teenagers feel more secure when they are close to their
family
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families
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. By
the
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contrast, supporters of
this
 view cite that potential benefits for boarding
school
 are responsibility, independence and personal development.
In addition
, many children can take various advantages
such
 as
life
 and
domestics
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 skills and maturity. It
also
 can be considered as good preparation for college
life
 and can become more adoptable. Examples can be seen in those who have small children or parents who struggle
busy
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 work
schedule
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, it relieves the pressure. It is logical to conclude that boarding
school
 can indeed be a useful option, with the experience leading to improved
life
 and social skills that are invaluable in
the
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college
life
. Of course,
this
 is financially challenging for parents and kids should be much more conscious.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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