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ome people consider price as most important thing to buy product (such as cell phone) or service (e.g. medical treatment). Do you agree or disagree?

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There is no doubt that the role of consumerism in our lives is increasing rapidly in comparison with over the
last
 decade. It is believed that the cost of products we need is the most influential one when
people
 purchase something for themselves, including several technologies and services. I completely disagree with
this
 viewpoint and
this
 essay will be supported with some examples.
Firstly
, I believe that price does not play an important role during the time of taking your favourite items from any stores. There is something else to think about,
such
 as
brand
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 and quality of the product.
For example
, those who want to flaunt their wealth never mull over the cost of products as they are interested in being in
public
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the public
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 eye.
In addition
, if somebody who got accustomed to using their familiar brands
such
 as Apple or Samsung, they ,it does not matter how the price high, will definitely get them.
That is
 because
,
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apply
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 they know how to utilize
well
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it well
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 since they have been using
in
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it
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 their entire life and feel comfortable rather than using different ones. Another reason why I disagree with
this
 opinion is that they tend to be treated like affluent
people
 especially in terms of medical treatment.
For instance
, if
people
 had problems with their health, they were made to go
poor
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to poor
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 quality hospitals because of
low
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the low
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 budget in the past.
However
,
this
 phenomenon turned into positive sides with help of globalization which enables us to go abroad and opens the door to a new custom, new lifestyle and job opportunity as well. They realized that human life should
be stayed
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stay
have stayed
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 in the
first
 stage of
life
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the life
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 cycle.
Therefore
, it is often said that the better health you have got, the longer you are likely to live. In conclusion, some
people
 think that the consideration of a product or service is the most important thing while deciding
a
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on a
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good or service, but I think it
isnot
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is not
isn't
is now
 necessary in the majority of cases.
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