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many countries aim to improve their living standards by economic development, but some important social values are lost as a result. Do you think the advantages of economic development outweigh the disadvantages

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These days people are getting closer and borders are getting smaller because of
globalization
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.
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, there are some individuals who are worried about losing several social values due to
globalization
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. It is undeniable that
globalization
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 has resulted in both positive and negative effects which must be addressed
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 in
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 essay. Let’s begin by looking at the advantages of
globalization
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 all around the
world
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. One of the main positives of
this
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 concept is that it has the potential to make
this
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world
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 a better place to live in and solve some of the deep-seated problems
such
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 as unemployment and poverty. What I mean by
this
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 is that
although
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 people are struggling to find a job in order to support their family members
some
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part
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 of the
world
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, you have the chance to be employed and helps you supply your family with basic necessities like shelter, food and drinks.
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, there is cultural intermingling and each country is learning more about other
cultures
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.
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, during the early period of
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nineth
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century
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 there were a number of barriers
such
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 as tariffs,
value added
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 taxes and subsidies between nations which made it more difficult to export and import their products
country
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 to country.
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, many states are supposed to unite so as to flourish their economies with the help of
globalization
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. Turning to the other side of
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,
globalization
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 has led to exploitation
labor
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.
In other words
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, when you want to run your own business, you need low salary workers to make your profit better rather than expansions. Take
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prisoners and children as an example, they are used to work inhumane conditions. Safety standards are ignored to reach the highest in
business
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the business
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world
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. Another issue is that it can be difficult to keep national traditions and
cultures
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 alive. If they construct their own factory in other countries, they may try to bring their own
cultures
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 as
the
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time passes.
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,
globalization
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destroy
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 unique
cultures
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 in these places and contributes to the development of a global village. In conclusion, even though it has got some drawbacks of spreading
globalization
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, personally I believe the benefits in terms of economic growth and social opportunities outweigh any negatives.
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