It is inevitable that as technology advances, traditional cultures will be lost. It seems that we cannothave these two things together. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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the present area have inevitable been an essential part of peoples daily life .A lot of
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technological society . The majority reason
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development .It would be far
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teenagers gradually forget traditional festival and
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that traditional
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like a bond to connect different generations .There
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some traditional knowledge which
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from grand generation .
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until they teach their
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.To sum up it seems that traditional
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are vulnerable and it would be easier replaced by technology .Actually traditional are stronger than anything .
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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
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  • therefore
  • however
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