Some countries have an ever-increasing proportion of the population who are aged 15 and younger. What is your opinion of the current and future effects it may have in those countries?

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In some countries, the number of 15-year-olds and younger people
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to increase. The countries might currently struggle with
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trend. In my view, I believe the countries’ future can get advantages from
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trend. On the one hand, to raise
children
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, their parents have to spend a lot of money on that,
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as health care fees, education, eating and clothes, and they have to make an effort for their
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's care.
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, the parents’ pressure can increase, so
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can affect their work.
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, it is true that the government invests their budget for education, security and public health, and their budget is collected from the community.
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, if the number of under 15 aged
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increases, the government will have to use more money for those services, and the people who pay taxes might be under pressure.
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, to keep the local communities, many
workers
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are necessary,
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, an increase of under 15
children
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is very helpful for the countries.
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with, to support the market economy, many labour forces who work in various industries
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as manufacturing and office are needed.
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, recent society struggles with an ageing society and not enough
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.
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, Japanese society is one of the oldest societies, and many Japanese companies have problems recruiting
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.
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, various fields of work face a lack of employees.
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, the lack of labour will be alleviated because of the
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in the future. In conclusion,
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trend might be a problem in the current situation because of the adults’ pressure, I believe
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tendency will be a key to increasing the number of
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ever-increasing
  • proportion
  • vibrant
  • innovative
  • strain
  • cater
  • predominantly
  • unemployment
  • adequately
  • GDP (Gross Domestic Product)
  • sustainability
  • demographic
  • reforms
  • social unrest
  • illusioned
  • dynamic
  • global stage
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