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With increasing use and development of new technology, many machines are now able to do the work which people used to perform . what are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend.

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There are two graphs that illustrate graduates and postgraduate
students
 who did not continue to have a full-time job on the UK continent in the year
of
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2008. In general, the trend from column graphs has the same tendencies,
for instance
, the student either graduates or postgraduates that intended to continue their
study
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 got a higher number of people rather than other various types of intents. Meanwhile,
students
 who have intended to do a voluntary job are well beneath one
third
 compared to those who took
further
 study. In terms of opting for higher studies,
graduate
students
 seem more enthusiastic than postgraduates. Not only did they rank at the top of the list, namely 29.665, the contrast with postgraduates was
also
 remarkable.
On the other hand
, voluntary work was ranked at the bottom of the list for both
graduate
 and postgraduate
students
, 3.500 and 345 respectively. As regards part-time work, the
graduate
students
 comprised 17.735, while that category in postgraduate
students
 only reached 2.535.
Likewise
, the unemployment category in
graduate
students
 that ranked in the
third
 place was approximately ten times higher than postgraduate
students
,at 16.235.

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