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All children should learn to speak a foreign language as soon as they start school.’ How far do you agree with this proposal? How important is it for a child to learn a foreign language?

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In recent years, an increasing number of parents are aspiring their
child
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 to learn a foreign
language
, especially at the start of school. Personally, I feel that gaining knowledge of
second
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language
 at
early
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 age
have
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number
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 of benefits for them.
Firstly
, primary
school’s
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 bilingual pupils tend to have
as well as
 improved memory, concentration, and mental flexibility.
In other words
,
obviously
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 young
children
 pick up
languages
 more easily than teenagers. Because their brains are programmed to learn their mother tongue which
also
 facilitates learning another
language
.
Secondly
, acquiring foreign
languages
 can
also
 help them to understand other cultures. If they are native-like speakers, they would understand foreign ideas and concepts which
makes
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 them more access to diverse cultures and international experiences from
early
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an early
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 stage of their
life
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.
Lastly
, the cognitive benefits of learning a
language
 have a direct impact on a child’s academic achievements. Bilingual
children
 have improved reading,
writing
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 skills and they generally score higher on
a
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standardized
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. The future is more granted that they may have more access to global employment;
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a wider variety of available positions. Some people argue that teaching
children
 a second
language
 at an early age might affect badly mother tongue. It results in they might be mixing
languages
 and
worsen
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 reading,
writing
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 skills.
However
,
children
 might get confused
initially
, but they
overcome
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. In conclusion, young
children
 at the early stage in educational institutions should be allowed to learn different
languages
 which they choose. There are many advantages to
children
.
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