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Some people feel that boarding schools (where students or pupils live at the school during the term) are an excellent option for children, while other people disagree for a number of reasons. Consider both sides of this debate and reach a conclusion.

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It is often said that children benefit from boarding
schools
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 where
students
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 must stay all the
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 during a particular term,
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 become increasingly popular these days,
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 those who reject the idea of staying in
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schools
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.
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, the issue is not entirely straightforward, and arguments can
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, those who support sending
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 to boarding colleges cite the benefits that
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 colleges offer to
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 college
students
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. First of all, college
students
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 are constantly under the supervision of a teacher, which guarantees
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 lifestyle.
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,
students
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 can get educational help from their instructors every
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 they
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that
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 is unlikely in different colleges.
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, as youngsters get to stay in playful surroundings with their friends, they could experience their free
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 approaches together
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 outdoor games and
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book
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 clubs. They discover ways of engaging as a team players’ attitude from
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 young age, which permits them to be co-operative of their workplace.
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, there may be those who oppose the concept of boarding faculties because of the numerous drawbacks of
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 faculties. The most important reason is that the student’s precious
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 with their family will be taken away. Spending quality
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 with
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 circle of relatives may be very critical for college
students
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 of boarding
schools
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,
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 because it has an extensive effect
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 their
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, character and attitude.
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, very often the
students
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 who come from a boarding school are found to be antisocial and introverted in nature during their university life. Another reason is,
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schools
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 these days,
students
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 face harassment and bullying from the seniors and it is highly likely
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 in boarding
schools
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. In conclusion, it is logical to infer that,
students
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 should stay with their family and go to regular
schools
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 rather than boarding
schools
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. It appears that the drawbacks of sending
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 to boarding
schools
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 far
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 the minor advantages that it provides.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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