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Some people feel that boarding schools (where students or pupils live at the school during the term) are an excellent option for children, while other people disagree for a number of reasons.

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It is often said that children benefit from boarding schools, especially
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 world.
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, those have a two-way position in that question.
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students
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 cite various benefits that the activity can bring to pupils. These range from learning to
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decision
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by
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 your opinion.
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, managing study
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 for academic achievements and
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 a private organization to improve ability. Another argument is the emotional support that
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 live in accommodation, meaning that the pupil
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 freedom and more responsibility.
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, opponents of
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 live in
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 of school. Examples can be seen in some countries, where
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students
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a dormitory
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. In
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 many
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 live in comfortable
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 with lovely family environments to create a warm situation. For these families,
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 pay attention
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to children
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 safety with having a good
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 and unforgettable memories.
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, it must be said that not all
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 want to live in school boarding, because their interests
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differently
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 so their
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 opinion spend more
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application
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. Those control
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how to spend their free
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 their success
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 of
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, it seems that the decision to live in
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 should be based on
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student’s
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,
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 and family
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especially
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 the best view is where the student wants to live. Some
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on
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parents
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discussion
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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