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What are the causes of student bad behavior? What can be done to deal with this problem?

Many
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 are facing serious
problems
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 of their students’
behaviours
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, which come in
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 various forms as bullying, physically, verbally and socially. In some
schools
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, students simply do not respect their teachers and
school
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 staff, teasing or pulling dangerous pranks on their supervisors. In others, students, often those in high
schools
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, smoke cigarettes and do illegal drugs in
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 properties. These bad
behaviours
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 can be traced to several causes, and I think the government,
schools
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 and families need to join hands to combat the situation. One important factor for
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 associated with student
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 is
parents
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. It is true that
parents
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 play a crucial role in their
kids
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’
behaviours
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;
children
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 often adopt what they perceive at home and express it to other people. In many cases, busy
parents
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 do not pay enough attention to their
kids
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, so
children
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 do not learn to distinguish what they should and should not do. In some cases,
parents
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 simply ignore their duties and are abusive at home, contributing to their
children
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 resorting to violence when in conflicts with their friends. Another key factor for these
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school
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. Many
schools
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 that face severe
problems
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 with student
behavior
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 are often negligent. They take
soft-handed
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 approach when dealing with teenagers and are not strict enough to say no to unacceptable
behaviours
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. Realising that their violence, pranks and disrespectful actions are acceptable, these
kids
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 will continue to cause troubles in, if not out of,
schools
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 and some might become juvenile delinquents. To mitigate the situations, the government,
schools
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 and families must cooperate. The government can run campaigns against inappropriate
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schools
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 to raise awareness about the gravity of these troubles.
Schools
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,
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, must take a stand against bullying and disrespectful
behaviours
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, setting zero tolerance for
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 actions and punishing students who violate the
school
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 rules. Teachers may employ severe punishments
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 as spanking or suspension to show that they are serious. At home,
parents
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 must devote enough time to their
kids
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, making sure to
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children
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 and understand their
children
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’s needs. For those who have troubled
kids
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,
parents
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 should encourage
children
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 to express their feelings and take them to therapists if necessary. They can
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 employ active sports that allow
children
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 to
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 their energy and temper in an appropriate manner. In conclusion, students’ bad
behavior
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 is influenced by two main factors:
parents
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 and
schools
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. At the same time, they are the ones who must take initiative to help these young people to behave appropriately.

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