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Social media enable people to keep in touch with each other and learn about news events. Do advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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Human beings spend approximately 4 or 5 hours daily surfing various social
media
. So it broadens the opportunities
such
 as contacting
people
 around the world and spreading recent news happening every
second
.
However
, the demerits can be found in social
media
, which could overshadow the merits.
Firstly
, the main option of social
media
 is to link
people
 over long distances. So while networking
people
 are able to talk with each other and could be informed about the events happening in their life.
For example
, the crowd who living in Europe could contact the
people
 living in Asia just by typing or skyping.
Secondly
, social
media
 gives them access to enormous news sources.
As a result
, a society with the help of social
media
 learns any kind of news in seconds. On the other side, using social
media
 in an adversely harmful way is quite probable. One of the cons could be the fact that the youngsters are exposed to psychological violence every day. Many proofs can be found that via social
media
 the terrorist organizations propagandize their own ideology in order to attract more supporters and attention.
Moreover
, spending most of the time on Instagram or Facebook might lead to stress or mental trauma as at any time
people
 could come across content containing material of an offensive or sexual nature.
Thus
, social
media
 could harm
people
 in many ways. To conclude, even social
media
 have undeniable pros, the possibility to get more negative drawbacks is highly,
consequently
, the cons outweigh the pros. So, the government should take social
media
 under control and ban the owners of any type of negative material
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