Social media enable people to keep in touch with each other and learn about news events. Do advantages outweigh disadvantages?

The internet and social
media
are decorating peoples
life
by making communication easy during stressful daily routines.
However
, the drawbacks of social
media
also
are undeniable. The forthcoming paragraphs will present the advantages and disadvantages of social
media
.
Social
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network has already become a part of our
life
. Individuals can share their unforgettable moments and
information
about them through Instagram and Facebook.
Consequently
,
such
kind of interaction of
people
can create new communities where
people
with similar world-outlook can help each other at the mutual ideas.
Moreover
,
people
can compare the lifestyles of others and make a conclusion or be
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motivated
with.
For instance
, some has reached the
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while another one is watching it on Youtube and of
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course
people
will contemplate about it. At
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firts
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first
glance, social
media
is innocent and harmless, whereas it has myriad drawbacks. Publishing innumerable
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of personal
information
can lead to losing
the
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private
life
.
For
example
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if
person
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a person
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share
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each moment of his or her
life
with the world, his or her
life
will be not interesting for others.
Moreover
, among the countless
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it is
really
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a really
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hard job to identify the true authentic one. In many cases,
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especially
young users of
internet
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the internet
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posts news and
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data
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without
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with out
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without
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having any fundamental knowledge about it.
As a
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false news will be circulated and many
people
will be in panic spontaneously.
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, social
media
created great opportunities
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easy communication and exchange
information
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of information
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.
However
,
the
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publishing personal
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must be
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seriously
other wise
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otherwise
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the
privet
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private
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life
of individuals can
be endanger
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be endangered
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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