Some believe that younger family members should be legally responsible for supporting older family members when they become physically financially and mentally unable to look after themselves.To what extent do you agree or disagree

Legally some experts argue that
,
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young
people
are obligated to care for the older folks when they are financially,physically and psychologically having challenges and cannot look after themselves.In
this
write up I strongly disagree with
this
position .
To begin
with,those who are not in
support
of
this
argument believed that the Elderly should have an
insurance
policy against their old age ,so that they can depend on
this
insurance
each time they need it ,
instead
of the younger
people
using their expenses for that .
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older they are prone to a lot of
disease
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so
this
insurance
can cater for them.
Moreover
,the government is responsible
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supporting the aged.
This
is because the burden of the aged if put on the younger members of the family will make it difficult for them to be financially free.The governments would raise
fund
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to
support
the aged and employ
people
to cater for them.
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of
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a geriatric home for the aged will relieve the burden from young family members. Despite the fact that it is the responsibility of the young
people
to care for the aged those in
support
of
this
argue
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that,the elderly have invested in the younger
people
,so showing love and
support
is what they need from the younger ones.
This
point is not sustainable because there are elderly ones who do not care or invested in their children and expect them to do so as they are physically psychologically and financially unable . In conclusion,the aged should have an
insurance
policy and the governments should
support
them it should not be the legal responsibility of the younger ones to
support
them in their old age
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • filial piety
  • elder care
  • aging population
  • public resources
  • state welfare
  • financial burden
  • legal mandate
  • family dynamics
  • moral responsibility
  • residency
  • integrity
  • dependency
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