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University education should be free for all students. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Education should be free for all students when it is related to educational institutions.
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, in my ,opinion I agree with
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 statement
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 I will detail my opinion
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this
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 essay. Higher education definitely should be free for all
admission
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.
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,
in
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my
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,opinion I highly agree with
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 statement since not everyone has the financial power to join a college.
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, many individuals have a hard life where they barely achieve a level of discipline that allows them to join a college. The reason for
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 is
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 their lack of monetary privilege that makes it almost impossible for them to join a university.
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, if universities were free there
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 more young people putting effort
to finish
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 their elementary education
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leveraging
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 their personal development.
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, the most significant advantage of having a free university tuition charge for all students is that it can not only improve the local economy but
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 make the individual's life who did the graduation much better.
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, if
universities
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university
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 tuition were free and there
had
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 an effort by the local authorities for them to finish their degree many positive things could happen
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the
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 decrease
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 a stock of minds that could help the government to improve the local economy by allocating them strategically in the long term. In conclusion,
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 the majority of universities are paid and hard for poor students to join it could positively change the local economy if implemented for free. The result of
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 could bring an excellent impact for the person who joined and finished their graduation
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 for their family and community.

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