University education should be free for all students. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Education should be free for all students when it is related to educational institutions.
Therefore
, in my ,opinion I agree with this
statement where
I will detail my opinion Correct word choice
and
through
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in
this
essay.
Higher education definitely should be free for all admission
. Fix the agreement mistake
admissions
Nevertheless
, in
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apply
my
,opinion I highly agree with Correct pronoun usage
apply
this
statement since not everyone has the financial power to join a college. For example
, many individuals have a hard life where they barely achieve a level of discipline that allows them to join a college. The reason for this
is due to
their lack of monetary privilege that makes it almost impossible for them to join a university. For example
, if universities were free there were
more young people putting effort Wrong verb form
would be
to finish
their elementary education Change preposition
into finishing
as a result
leveraging
their personal development.
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of leveraging
Nevertheless
, the most significant advantage of having a free university tuition charge for all students is that it can not only improve the local economy but also
make the individual's life who did the graduation much better. For instance
, if universities
tuition were free and there Fix the agreement mistake
university
had
an effort by the local authorities for them to finish their degree many positive things could happen Verb problem
was
such
as the
decrease Correct article usage
a
of
hungriness in the middle term Change preposition
in
as well as
a stock of minds that could help the government to improve the local economy by allocating them strategically in the long term.
In conclusion, although
the majority of universities are paid and hard for poor students to join it could positively change the local economy if implemented for free. The result of this
could bring an excellent impact for the person who joined and finished their graduation as well as
for their family and community.Submitted by Elias
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