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Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important for children to go to school.

#people #children #home #child #development #school
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There is no denying the fact that the main requirement of education ways is arguable. There are some
people
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believe
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who believe
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 that teaching at
home
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 is best but other
people
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 do not agree with that which they think the child should go to school.
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 essay will discuss both ideas. While it is held belief, teaching at
home
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 is better for children, they
warry
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worry
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 about which kind of
people
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 their children will meet and they think about
bulling
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bullying
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 which probably the student doing to each other in
now days
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nowadays
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, as statistic approximately 60% of kid face some problems lead to psychological problems in future. Which
that
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apply
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support
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 view and make some of right with
people
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 who think like that.
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Also
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 mothers do not like when
hear
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hearing
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her
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their
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 child
said
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say
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 some bad
word
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words
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 learn from other students or bad
action
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actions
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 because
that
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apply
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they want to teach the kids from
home
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 to keep
him
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them
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good
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a good
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 person. On
other hand
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another hand
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, other
people
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 have
opposite
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the opposite
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 opinion, because they think the student should
be go
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go
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 inside the society to develop
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their
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them
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the
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 skills and learn more from
meet
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meeting
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 different
people
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 come from many backgrounds
,
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 to
growing
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 healthy and strong. During COVID-19 we can
noted
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note
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 the
different
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difference
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 in students’
personality
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personalities
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 how they
loss
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lose
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 some social skills because they do
no
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not
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meat
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meet
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 their friends for
long
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a long
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 time. In conclusion, the kids should be mingling with
other
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others
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 and the
parents
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parent's
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 job teaching them how they can protect themselves from any hurt, I believe the school society even the kids face bad thing but it is better than studying from
home
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