Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important for children to go to school.

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that teaching at
home
is best but other
people
do not agree with that which they think the child should go to school.
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this
essay will discuss both ideas. While it is held belief, teaching at
home
is better for children, they
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worry
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about which kind of
people
their children will meet and they think about
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bullying
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which probably the student doing to each other in
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, as statistic approximately 60% of kid face some problems lead to psychological problems in future. Which
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support
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view and make some of right with
people
who think like that.
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mothers do not like when
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her
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their
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child
said
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some bad
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learn from other students or bad
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because
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they want to teach the kids from
home
to keep
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them
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good
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person. On
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, other
people
have
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the opposite
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opinion, because they think the student should
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inside the society to develop
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them
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the
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skills and learn more from
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different
people
come from many backgrounds
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to
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healthy and strong. During COVID-19 we can
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the
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in students’
personality
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personalities
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how they
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some social skills because they do
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not
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meat
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meet
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their friends for
long
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a long
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time. In conclusion, the kids should be mingling with
other
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others
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and the
parents
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parent's
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job teaching them how they can protect themselves from any hurt, I believe the school society even the kids face bad thing but it is better than studying from
home
.
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